Nobody comes to our house on Halloween.
Staring out the bay window, my shadow breaks the warm glow that pierces the inky black stain of night laying across the hill. In the distance, headlights swim the roads like a river, carrying souls, wrapped in masquerade, to haunt the houses down each lane. Splaying my hand, reaching for them, vibrations of long skeletal fingers on leafless limbs rake back against mine through the glass.
Nobody comes to our house on Halloween.
Moonlight shimmers off the gravel road winding up the hill, disappearing behind the murk of the family cemetery, where shadows deepen, sucking all the light into the black hole of lost souls. Two graves lay open, mouths waiting to be fed any who trespass. We found a boy there once, huddled against the cold breath of death at the bottom of the concrete sarcophagus, where he fell during my birthday party.
Nobody comes to our house on Halloween.
Woods surrounding the hill, erupt with the rattle of old bones, trees rubbing against each other, we lie to ourselves. Babies cries scream hard on the night wind, it must be cats, we try to believe. Hearts beat staccato, slow tongue of terror worming up the spine, as a figure passes between the solemn rows of names chiseled in stone, finding its home then winks out of sight.
Nobody comes to our house on Halloween.
Voices beckon from empty rooms, thumps against the closet door, footsteps running down the floor. All Hallows Eve, the one night when the ghosts don't seem real, comes and goes as the lights go out.
Nobody comes to our house on Halloween, but they are always there.
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Wednesday, October 28, 2009
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Chilling :) Your use of imagery is superb.
yeah, the old hill i grew up on was filled with vivid imagery...and a few frightful nights...
The "rattle of old bones" BRRRRR. Loved it, Brian.
I can't imagine falling in a hole in a cemetery during a birthday party...yikes!
He he HEEEEEEE
No one comes to our house on Halloween either.we have a big old house and not many little ones around. No cemetery though. Oh well, more candy for us!
Man oh man!!! When I was reading that, my "inner voice" sounded like Vincent Price!!! Great take, and Happy TT!
Like Jasmine said - 'Chilling'...
Loved it! :)
Oh, I love this!
I love Skip's comment. Really liked this one. The description wasn't of the normal Halloween kind, very creepy. And, by the way, loved the meatloaf story as well. Very beautiful. Actually, it was fun to read them one after the other since they are both very opposite emotions. Cheers!
Spooky! Very good - totally different from your last post. You have a great range!
great story and really wonderful imagery. You're pretty darn amazing...and spooky...
I love the images that your words bring to mind. We don't as many trick or treaters anymore. When the weather is nice we get more. When it's cold or raining(or snowing)or both, we just get a few.
Brian! I love the imagery, but I am puzzled by something?
"Splaying my hand, reaching for them, vibrations of long skeletal fingers on leafless limbs rake back against mine through the glass."
are you a ghost, telling this story??
Why are closets SO scary?!
I must be stupid tonight! I get it LOL!
I'm glad that I read this at night. I love a spooky story! Thanks Brian!
I love this week's theme! I will have to go back and read them all this weekend. Great halloween poem!!
Oh! That was rather a chilly-reading! The images that you've painted with your words are so vivid!
oh very good...very spooky...especially about the boy who fell at the birthday party...
much love
Bone chilling. Yowser! A tale to tell around a campfire!
Shiver me timbers!
That was just bad ass! I totally got the willies and had to grab a blankie to sit with while I read this post! Doesn't help I'm a big wuss. Thankfully there weren't any werewolves in it! Oh crap . . . There I go . . .
Wow. Haunting.
Geez! Glad I read that right before bed.
Eerie! Well told, as always.
Hi! Brian,
Very eerie, bone chilling post...I agree with Willow's sister Betsy...Yikes!
When it comes to what happened to the little kid falling into an open grave.
Thanks, for sharing a very vivid Halloween memory with the Thursday Theme group!
Take Care!
DeeDee ;-D
Great stufff!
Maybe a few geraniums and a new mailbox?
That was creepy, Brian. Creepy in the most wonderful way! Especially this...
"...slow tongue of terror worming up the spine..."
Now that is one good Halloween story or the start of one.
Thanks for your comment on my blog.
Look at it this way, if nobody comes to your house on Halloween, that just means more candy for you! Ahh, there is a good side.
A bit freaky as I have a mental image of WHAT this house LOOKS LIKE! Although it may be quite typical looking by day...at night when the shadows fall and things move unexpectedly...well...I have a creative imagination! ;)
Oooo Brian, rattle of old bones.... you almost convinced this old established sceptic. No-one comes to our house on Halloween either... grins
Creeeeeeeepy, Brian. But so vivid. I'll read it to my kids tonight....
I wish I could write like this..it is like reading a movie.
Brian, did you go to a special school to learn to write this awesome?
i attribute it to great high school english teacher...my degree is actually in criminal justice/psychology/sociology/special education...go figure...i read a lot...and i got great friends who write amazing as well...
The house we live in is on a cul-de-sac and a large cemetery along the back side of our houses. You would think this would be a great help with the Halloween "spirit" in our neighborhood!
wow!that was creepy!I definitely don't want to come!lol
You are an amazing writer. I hope you are writing for a living. There are many outlets available for freelance writing.
But I still think that a writer is better off writing something s/he is passionate about and offering it as an ebook.
You have such a large following that I think offering an ebook on your blog will bring you buyers.
How about an ebook with writings reflecting different moods?
Love, Kathy kathyberman.com.
Sppoky and amazing.. i love the line 'Nobody comes to our house on Halloween.' well thank GOD they do not!
Seriously spooky and so well done.
I wouldn't come to your house on Halloween either. Nuh uh, I'm chicken.
They won't be coming to my house this year- first time in years, we won't be home! Usually get 50-70 kids!
Love it! Needs to be read with some creepy background noises by candlelight..... or next to a campfire in the woods.....
Creepy!
Happy Halloween!
Very atmospheric and perfect for the holiday. The ghost is our house just likes to hang out by the frig.
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Ooh! Very scary! (Count me as one of those who won't be coming either.)
It's probably because you're scary.
Sounds a bit like my house...!!
CJ xx
wow, that was rally intense. Excellent story. I revised my post a little bit and added a poem. Check it out if you have the time.
"Nobody comes to our house on Halloween, but they are always there."
So well encapsulated - all that was, ever is... great words at play!
Stunning imagery, Brian. I ahope your boys and you and your wife enjoy Halloween.
Did the boys enjoy making their costumes?
"...vibrations of long skeletal fingers on leafless limbs rake back against mine through the glass..."
this is a really well-written piece, Brian. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
wow...love the last line and that Brillant mind of yours!
S-P-O-O-K-Y!! Happy Halloween!!
Very cool theme this week. I love being scared - in a good kind of way.
A perfectly chilling tale -- I thoroughly enjoyed it!
Wow look at your comments all these chillseekers!
Great imagery... as always. I grew up with a cemetary very close too.
I heard organ music in the background as I read that. Spooky. Great post!
e, most definitely...we wrapped up the pirate outfit today. will post some pics saturday or sunday!
boo! that was excellent! really really!
yikes tom, you scared me...lol.
You mentioned this in your comment on my post. "nobody comes to our house on Halloween". It sounded wistful in the comment but it sounds scary now.
Creepy!!!
Nice refrain, too.
I could picture that, hear that, and feel that! Awesome!
Oh..I Iove spooky..ghost stories all week on my blog...and the poem about the young prostitutes was heart-breaking......and well written.....
I feel for that boy stuc in the grave!!
Very moody piece here. nicely done as always.
Happy ween. No one come to my place either I think--well, I don;t know but will find out. I;'m rather hoping they don;t in fact. Not really into the gore end of things honestly.
Darn it, wish i hadn't missed TT though. Completely escaped me. I've been sick and recovering from food poisoning I think.
Pity To Poor Postman!
I wouldn't dare to go trick or treating over there either!
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