Tuesday, October 27, 2009

F word

feet
forgo
foundation
finding
freedom's
flight
in the multicolor explosion
of the bounce house.

fluttering
festive
flow,
flounce
falling
flat
against the soft air cushion
of the bounce house.

ferocious
foul
flap,
failure
fool
f**k up
air whistles in a scream, out
of the bounce house.

feast,
famine,
fail,
flourish
found
forsaken
laying on the floor
of the bounce house?

Numb, their words slid right down her back in a cold snear, no matter the new names they thought to give her. You need lessons in creatively cutting me down to your level...you should try listening to my parents, thoughts leak slowly in a hiss of scars across her arms. When she wins they take all the credit, when she fails, she's all alone, except their words. Carving her heart like a jack-o-lantern.

Family is an F word, that should only have four letters, if you let it start with L.

47 comments:

willow said...

Powerful post, Brian. Kids need so much care and nurturing, at all ages.

Lorraine said...

oh man sometimes you just break my heart

Travel & Dive Girl said...

So true and yet a simple word that is forgotten by so many.

Gaston Studio said...

"Family is an F word, that that should only have four letters, if you let it start with L."

Truer words were never spoken/written Brian; wonderful, creative post.

g-man said...

Freaky Fun my Friend!!

Brian Miller said...

yeah, i probably need to lay off the intensity and do a couple fun posts in a row...its been a really weird couple weeks with real life situations, all outside of my immediate family...

lorraine, it breaks my heart too at times...

Maggie May said...

Yes..... families are all a question of luck! Where you live, what they are like, whether you are loved or not!
Very good!

Nuts in May

Harnett-Hargrove said...

It's a alliteration kind of day. Well done. -J

Eternally Distracted said...

Ooooo I love your posts mister

TechnoBabe said...

Family has an "in" when it comes to letting people hurt us. But they also have an "up" when it comes to praise.

Alan Burnett said...

fine words, fine sentiments.

Meeko Fabulous said...

I loved that! Family should be a four-letter word if it starts with L.

Goofball said...

I'm afraid I've missed your point in this post as I didn't get much further than the fun jumping in the bounce house. sorry!

(flying by again with her arms up in the air)

kys said...

Another great post! You are terrific at this.

Valerie said...

Did I like this. No, I loved it.
Wonderful writing, Brian.

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Frighteningly familiar . . .

Ronda Laveen said...

Ahhh...You've hit a new level, Little One! This is simple, deep and telling. This needs to be published not only here but where many others can read it.

L..., ronda

staceyjwarner said...

Very powerful! Sounds like my parents...

much love

AngelMay said...

Family - four letters - beginning with L - LOST.

Painful.

Alix said...

Your four letter F word that start with L is lucky to have you.

rxBambi said...

I'm afraid I'm missing something. I found this post terribly heartbreaking, but I don't understand the family-four letter word bit. I know you shouldn't have to explain, but I feel lost... help me out wontcha?

Poetikat said...

"hiss of scars across her arms"
Wow! That's quite a statement!

There's so much levity juxtaposed with darkness and despair in this piece. You've done an excellent job of presenting the contrasts.

Tracey said...

Wonderful post! This might be one of my favorites although it's hard to pick just a few favorites....I have many favorite posts of yours.
(Green-Eyed Momster)

lakeviewer said...

You're a family man all right. And you show it. Love the image of the bouncing house, the foundation and the freedom all in one place.

Nessa said...

Our families can be so nice to us.

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Daniel said...

Powerful message today. This needs to be broadcast far and wide.

jake (to the) holla said...

fact!

Brian Miller said...

so i got a few questions on what this is really all about...really its about listening to the words families us as they talk to each other...about how many times we can take something that should be fun and twist it into the end of the world...about when our kids do something good, stealing their glory and when they fail leaving them alone to live in the shame...i think thats a little backward. families in many ways etch the record a child will hear in their head the rest of their lives...so is our bounce house full or flat?

otin said...

Fabulous......

Positive words are so precious to a developing mind!

Negative words tend to stick with children.

Hilary said...

Such true words. Heart-breakingly true.

Bogey said...

Hi Brian, and thanks for stopping by blog earlier today thru Lori (Smiles 4You) and leaving a thoughtful comment. Very much appreciated.

Your post here speaks volumes as to the column I was refering to in my post. A humble parent places their child upon a pedestal and lets them take the bows for their own successes. The pride in their own heart should be reward enough. Failure? Hmmm! Robert Kennedy once said, "Only those who dare to fail greatly can ever achieve greatly."

Betsy said...

I agree with Otin! That says it all!

Jaime said...

hmmm... i was thinking about a totally different "f word"

but those were all very good f words too

blueviolet said...

That old sticks and stones rhyme is wrong. Words do hurt...forever.

smiles4u said...

"Family is an F word, that should only have four letters, if you let it start with L." Powerful! Wow! Brian, I love that you write from your heart and with such meaning.

Pastor Sharon said...

I do love this! I really love the family four letter word!

Hit 40 said...

Jane said it very well. My family is currently in the 4 letter F word for me right now. I have had enough of their bizarre behavior. Not worth my time anymore.

tattytiara said...

Fierce, and I'd say that even if it didn't start with an F.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

Words are powerful and can be used as weapons. Weapons can protect those we love...or they can destroy them just as easily.....

Kathy's Klothesline said...

Words are powerful and can be used as weapons. Weapons can protect those we love...or they can destroy them just as easily.....

BeautifulWreck said...

OMG.. I love this post. Definitely an all time favorite.

Jill said...

Oh wow Brian....good words...good words...

The Retired One said...

Fantastic last line...quotable!!

tori said...

Brian, your posts make me want to just quietly sit and think for a while, about the past, how I am handling the present, and changing my future actions.

Pat said...

I always have to read your posts over a few times to mull them over a bit. This is very powerful stuff. Wow. You are deep.

...mmm... said...

Very powerful ending adn so true for many.

Jingle said...

fresh, family, fame, fun,
fan of yours.
love this F post!
Have A Smiling Evening!