Thursday, October 15, 2009

55 - crunch

crunch...crunch...crunch...

silver spoon clinks
against the white breakfast bowl,
excess milk slurps
back into the pool
among the remnants of the cereal.

crunch...crunch...

sometimes we don't ask questions,
not because we fear the lies,
but because we are afraid
they will tell us the truth,
so we hide behind the newspaper.

crunch...

Tell a story in 55 words. Want to give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

60 comments:

Meeko Fabulous said...

Reminds me of dinner with my dad when I was younger. No, I didn't have cereal for dinner. The whole hiding behind his newspaper thing.

Brian Miller said...

communication is so integral to relationships, when it goes, so does intimacy. sure there still may be sex, but with who? in regular relationships it starts the slow drift apart. if we become afraid of the truth....

Green-Eyed Momster said...

This reminded me of times with my dad, when I was younger and when he was around.
Great 55.

otin said...

I don't know that I could kill someone in 55 words?? Um, yea I could, lol!

Prayer Girl said...

In the past I was so afraid of the truth. I often refused to hear or acknowledge it.

Today is so different. I am no longer alone or afraid and the truth sets me free.

PG

blueviolet said...

I'd agree with that. I think I hide sometimes.

SandyCarlson said...

I have often sought refuge behind the paper. This touched a nerve.

g-man said...

I hear a Harry Chapin tune playing in the background....
Excellent 55 Brian!!!
Thank you so much for joining in the Friday Funfest.
Have a Stellar Week-End....G

tori said...

I love your writing! I'm going to check out g-man. thanks

Betsy said...

Eating together but in silence. Such a sad but common occurrance.

willow said...

I grew up in a household like this.

Six Feet Under Blog said...

I think we all hide at one time or another.

Daniel said...

My marriage was totally doomed by lack of everything, most important in this list was lack of communication. Dang, I wish I had another chance to go back and try again. However, I am sure that I would continue to hide behind the "newspaper".

TechnoBabe said...

Probably half of our society hide behind the cereal bowl and newspaper.
This is a good conscience tester.

Alice Audrey said...

And sometimes it's too early in the morning, and we're all starting at nothing, half asleep.

enchantedoak said...

I'm glad you work with kids on the ward. They need all the help they're offered. Your 55 was awesome. Visit me again sometime.

Maggie May said...

Oh...... the sound of breakfast being eaten! I am feeling hungry now. I must go down & get mine!

Nuts in May

Matthew said...

I've done the 55 a few Fridays and always envied those who made it look effortless. I really enjoyed this one.

Marianna said...

Great short story :)

Feels good to be back lol
xoxo

anthonynorth said...

Truth is often the last thing we want to hear. Great words.

Protege said...

I think we all feel this way at times, as truth is not always so easy to bear. Perhaps it is because we feel that by ignoring problems, the will go away.
This was a great 55.;)

Goofball said...

silent meals are so awkward....except breakfast, then I am not awake yet and conversations are such a burden


Wow you have silver spoons ;)

boots said...

ha, our boys use to sit at the breakfast table like that and each one had to have their own cereal box to "read" in front of them...like their mom, NO TALKING till I am awake!
Really good 55

Dulce said...

So good, indeed. How we hide behind the paper... I love that. But what a shame isn't it?
great 55
Mine is UP as well
Have a nice weekend!

Chef Kar said...

Excellent 55 Brian, as always your words tell truth that is difficult to swallow sometimes. I am with PG on this one now though ~ the truth sets me free. I'm now able to hear it.

My 55 is posted here.

Have a wonderful weekend.

Chef Kar

Nessa said...

No reading at the table, Mister. Oh, and no talking either. Problem solved. Very touching 55.

Death and mayhem in my 55 HERE.

Dr.John said...

I guess it happens but in my entire life I never read a paper with my cereal. But it is hard to talk with your mouth full.
Our silver spoons are just for company and company gets eggs and toast.
Good 55
I have finished my 55.
You’ll find it

HERE.
.
But it’s a groaner.

Candie Bracci said...

When I hear crunch I think about that chocolate,this isn't relevant at all!Id rather be told the truth than that people hide things even if the truth is ugly.Nice story Brian!Good weekend to you!:)

Kay said...

ha! well isn't that the truth! :) nicely put together

clean and crazy said...

reminds me of breakfast with my girls, only i don't look up because i am staying away from the carbs!!

Lulda Casadaga said...

An insightful 55! I like the way you think...but, reading this 55 in the am, made me hungry for some cereal...:D Have a crunchy weekend.

Gaston Studio said...

I'm soooo glad we always had lively conversations at all of our meals. Would have been totally sad any other way.

Ocean Girl said...

They say, if you have to have a newspaper to eat together, you are an old bored couple.

But I say newspaper is not a barrier but a common pleasure.

On the 55 words story, words come out of you faster than one can munch away a spoon of cereal.

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Very well said. Communication is so important, yet in a world of so much technology, we don't actually do it as much as we should - face to face.

pheromone girl said...

Wow, fathers really do have a big impact on us, don't they?

Being a good one is themost important job - ever. Tied with being a good mom, of course...

Tall Kay said...

I'm a breakfast newspaper reader...and I never thought of it as hiding out...something to ponder. Excellent 55 and thought provoking.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Great job.
I can't say anything in just 55 words-- but you've probably figured that out already.
Have a great weekend.

Fandango said...

Dragons don't use spoons but we do love a breakfast bowl of dead bugs and sour milk.
Silver spoons are part of our treasure pile.
We communicate with telepathy so a newspaper wouldn't help.
Good 55

Monkey Man said...

Now it seems to be a computer screen or TV before us instead of a newspaper. You are so right about communication. My 55 is also up.

...mmm... said...

Clever and pointed indeed. Love your stuff.

Leah said...

Very challenging, 55 words! You did a great job, but then you are the master of elegant, spare, pithy prose.

Akelamalu said...

I hate silent meals, they just make you feel choked don't they?

Great 55 and thanks for dropping by to read mine. :)

Lorraine said...

I don't do challenges they irritate me lol but boy do I love that you can and do so brilliantly ;) CRUNCH

Thom said...

Ah to talk to a loved one and hear truth is what we should all strive for. Excellent 55. Have a wonderful Friday :)

Drahdrah said...

We all prefer not to know at some point, or about some things. How true.

staceyjwarner said...

in my family, no one hid but there wasn't conversation...

well done...

Nancy said...

I'll have to check out g-man. I'm not as good a story teller as you are.

Strumpet said...

Oh, this is great.

I love how you incorporate such vivid imagery AND onomatopoeia to get us right in the moment with both sight and sound.

Such a bold statement on avoidance and why we do it, and HOW we do it, on a daily basis.

Excellently-played.

Pat said...

This was REALLY a short, short story! I don't think I could do it in 55 words! Great job!

Pastor Sharon said...

Brian,
You always make it work. And this story of 55 words is one that deserves deep thought.

How many times do we avoid asking the questions for fear of the truth?

♥ Braja said...

I'm just laughing at Otin's comment....I wonder if he could kill that swiftly too :)))

♥ Braja said...

Actually they'd die of surprise if he did it in 55 words. There you go. :))

Shadow said...

those dreaded answers. i know that... i've skipped questions for that very reason. great 55!

Blue said...

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Ekanthapadhikan said...

This 55 thing is really getting into my head. I mean, why am I not able to come up with a 55 in my blog. Looks like a real challenge to me. Ah...

Needless to say, your 55 is one of the best I've read till now.

tony said...

Sometimes its hard to talk.........

Mama Zen said...

That is fabulous!

Hilary said...

Nicely done. I'm very uncomfortable when a meal partner opts to read rather than acknowledge my company with conversation. I never looked at it as hiding though...

Susan at Stony River said...

What a lovely choice of words in the first half, foreshadowing the second. And what a too-accurate portrayal of so many breakfasts each morning! Wonderful 55.

Jessie said...

a true scenario of communication at the table -- between kids and parents, and loves.

well done!

smiles,