crunch...crunch...crunch...
silver spoon clinks
against the white breakfast bowl,
excess milk slurps
back into the pool
among the remnants of the cereal.
crunch...crunch...
sometimes we don't ask questions,
not because we fear the lies,
but because we are afraid
they will tell us the truth,
so we hide behind the newspaper.
crunch...
Tell a story in 55 words. Want to give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
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Reminds me of dinner with my dad when I was younger. No, I didn't have cereal for dinner. The whole hiding behind his newspaper thing.
communication is so integral to relationships, when it goes, so does intimacy. sure there still may be sex, but with who? in regular relationships it starts the slow drift apart. if we become afraid of the truth....
This reminded me of times with my dad, when I was younger and when he was around.
Great 55.
I don't know that I could kill someone in 55 words?? Um, yea I could, lol!
In the past I was so afraid of the truth. I often refused to hear or acknowledge it.
Today is so different. I am no longer alone or afraid and the truth sets me free.
PG
I'd agree with that. I think I hide sometimes.
I have often sought refuge behind the paper. This touched a nerve.
I hear a Harry Chapin tune playing in the background....
Excellent 55 Brian!!!
Thank you so much for joining in the Friday Funfest.
Have a Stellar Week-End....G
I love your writing! I'm going to check out g-man. thanks
Eating together but in silence. Such a sad but common occurrance.
I grew up in a household like this.
I think we all hide at one time or another.
My marriage was totally doomed by lack of everything, most important in this list was lack of communication. Dang, I wish I had another chance to go back and try again. However, I am sure that I would continue to hide behind the "newspaper".
Probably half of our society hide behind the cereal bowl and newspaper.
This is a good conscience tester.
And sometimes it's too early in the morning, and we're all starting at nothing, half asleep.
I'm glad you work with kids on the ward. They need all the help they're offered. Your 55 was awesome. Visit me again sometime.
Oh...... the sound of breakfast being eaten! I am feeling hungry now. I must go down & get mine!
Nuts in May
I've done the 55 a few Fridays and always envied those who made it look effortless. I really enjoyed this one.
Great short story :)
Feels good to be back lol
xoxo
Truth is often the last thing we want to hear. Great words.
I think we all feel this way at times, as truth is not always so easy to bear. Perhaps it is because we feel that by ignoring problems, the will go away.
This was a great 55.;)
silent meals are so awkward....except breakfast, then I am not awake yet and conversations are such a burden
Wow you have silver spoons ;)
ha, our boys use to sit at the breakfast table like that and each one had to have their own cereal box to "read" in front of them...like their mom, NO TALKING till I am awake!
Really good 55
So good, indeed. How we hide behind the paper... I love that. But what a shame isn't it?
great 55
Mine is UP as well
Have a nice weekend!
Excellent 55 Brian, as always your words tell truth that is difficult to swallow sometimes. I am with PG on this one now though ~ the truth sets me free. I'm now able to hear it.
My 55 is posted here.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Chef Kar
No reading at the table, Mister. Oh, and no talking either. Problem solved. Very touching 55.
Death and mayhem in my 55 HERE.
I guess it happens but in my entire life I never read a paper with my cereal. But it is hard to talk with your mouth full.
Our silver spoons are just for company and company gets eggs and toast.
Good 55
I have finished my 55.
You’ll find it
HERE.
.
But it’s a groaner.
When I hear crunch I think about that chocolate,this isn't relevant at all!Id rather be told the truth than that people hide things even if the truth is ugly.Nice story Brian!Good weekend to you!:)
ha! well isn't that the truth! :) nicely put together
reminds me of breakfast with my girls, only i don't look up because i am staying away from the carbs!!
An insightful 55! I like the way you think...but, reading this 55 in the am, made me hungry for some cereal...:D Have a crunchy weekend.
I'm soooo glad we always had lively conversations at all of our meals. Would have been totally sad any other way.
They say, if you have to have a newspaper to eat together, you are an old bored couple.
But I say newspaper is not a barrier but a common pleasure.
On the 55 words story, words come out of you faster than one can munch away a spoon of cereal.
Very well said. Communication is so important, yet in a world of so much technology, we don't actually do it as much as we should - face to face.
Wow, fathers really do have a big impact on us, don't they?
Being a good one is themost important job - ever. Tied with being a good mom, of course...
I'm a breakfast newspaper reader...and I never thought of it as hiding out...something to ponder. Excellent 55 and thought provoking.
Great job.
I can't say anything in just 55 words-- but you've probably figured that out already.
Have a great weekend.
Dragons don't use spoons but we do love a breakfast bowl of dead bugs and sour milk.
Silver spoons are part of our treasure pile.
We communicate with telepathy so a newspaper wouldn't help.
Good 55
Now it seems to be a computer screen or TV before us instead of a newspaper. You are so right about communication. My 55 is also up.
Clever and pointed indeed. Love your stuff.
Very challenging, 55 words! You did a great job, but then you are the master of elegant, spare, pithy prose.
I hate silent meals, they just make you feel choked don't they?
Great 55 and thanks for dropping by to read mine. :)
I don't do challenges they irritate me lol but boy do I love that you can and do so brilliantly ;) CRUNCH
Ah to talk to a loved one and hear truth is what we should all strive for. Excellent 55. Have a wonderful Friday :)
We all prefer not to know at some point, or about some things. How true.
in my family, no one hid but there wasn't conversation...
well done...
I'll have to check out g-man. I'm not as good a story teller as you are.
Oh, this is great.
I love how you incorporate such vivid imagery AND onomatopoeia to get us right in the moment with both sight and sound.
Such a bold statement on avoidance and why we do it, and HOW we do it, on a daily basis.
Excellently-played.
This was REALLY a short, short story! I don't think I could do it in 55 words! Great job!
Brian,
You always make it work. And this story of 55 words is one that deserves deep thought.
How many times do we avoid asking the questions for fear of the truth?
I'm just laughing at Otin's comment....I wonder if he could kill that swiftly too :)))
Actually they'd die of surprise if he did it in 55 words. There you go. :))
those dreaded answers. i know that... i've skipped questions for that very reason. great 55!
sorry so late returning the post loved your 55.thanks for stopping bye my place Brian..
you'll find mine below.
click here
This 55 thing is really getting into my head. I mean, why am I not able to come up with a 55 in my blog. Looks like a real challenge to me. Ah...
Needless to say, your 55 is one of the best I've read till now.
Sometimes its hard to talk.........
That is fabulous!
Nicely done. I'm very uncomfortable when a meal partner opts to read rather than acknowledge my company with conversation. I never looked at it as hiding though...
What a lovely choice of words in the first half, foreshadowing the second. And what a too-accurate portrayal of so many breakfasts each morning! Wonderful 55.
a true scenario of communication at the table -- between kids and parents, and loves.
well done!
smiles,
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