Thursday, June 18, 2009

Crash

There is that moment that comes right before a crash, when all the world comes into clarity. Small details loom large, as if your eyes are grasping for things to hold onto in case this is the end, and time bends its weary back into s l o w m o t i o n. Hands immobile, though muscles scream, incapable of stopping the slide towards...

Crash! The rubber band snaps back, the second hand sweeping forward making up for previous abatement, fiercely skipping moments. Gravity is defied as debris take flight, air bags disburse like lead balloons. Spinning its way to the eerie...

Stop! Balanced precariously, the tower of books in his left hand weaved its way across the parking lot. Cellphone attached to his ear in the right, yack yack yack, his head snaked for emphasis. Eyes hidden behind onyx lenses rolled at the errant reply as his voice gained intensity...

Boom! Shrapnel littered the sidewalk, books lay pell mell, open to favored passages. Small voices begged understanding out of the abandoned cell that lay at the base of a plant. Bruised and swollen, the man and his pride cartwheeled a return visit to the parking lot. My mouth just gaped as he started to get...

Up! Vile rivers leaked through snarling lips at that which had so offended him. Poking thick fingers marked exclamation points at the end of each sentence. With a sickening thud his fist rained blows, echoing into the library, every eye turning to stare at the man assaulting the...

Door. Standing ever resolute in the face of his barrage, the same as it had when he walked into it. Steering my glance once again toward my car, a knowing smile graced my lips. The things we will do to avoid liability for our own ignorance.

Crash.

16 comments:

Verily I go. said...

Brian. You are an amazing read. I love listening to you. I know I would love watching you read a story. Do you read to the boys? I bet it is a performance.

Brian Miller said...

@verily - ty. i love reading to kids. Logan is out for the summer now but used to go frequently to lunch and then to the playground with them where we would make up stories to play...many of times pirates, with the slides as our ship. oh yeah, i can ham it up. smiles.

Wings said...

Wow - great. Do I use that adjective too much when I comment here? It is apt, though, every time. Just great.

Lover of Life said...

Great writing. Staccato sentences, painting a picture that evolves to the end. Terrific, Brian.

Candie Bracci said...

Brian,you are a writer and I definitely will support and buy your book once it will be written which will happen,I'm sure.Well you should and even you're already got your name.You'll definitely sell.I'm serious.Have a nice day!

Daniel said...

Well, this was indeed laid out nicely. An amusing picture painted that we had to witness, but took guilty pleasure in enjoying. The message, though, important.

Valerie said...

Agree with Wings... Wow! There's no better way to describe your writing. You have an amazing talent.

Lorraine said...

Oh well, oh wow... Sculptured to shock, retreive, shock, retreive, you are amazing !

Lola said...

superbly written, brian! and with a fine message to it. Your kids are so lucky. Ciao

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Very well written. I really enjoy reading your blogs - keep up the good work!

subtorp77 said...

Brian, when is the book coming out? You can't tell me you're not at least thinking of it? The way you can link up everything, marvelous!

Rain said...

Omg, I'm sure I've totally done that! Not being a douche with my yackity yacky bluetooth and designer shades, but just not paying attention then blaming it on that darn rock on the ground! LOL. Great post!

Ben said...

I know just what you mean. I was in a crash a few years back and I heard the screeching of tires just behind me less than a second before my car went to car heaven :( You describe it in really gripping detail. Very nicely written!

Brian Miller said...

@ben - ty. been in too many. our Xterra got destroyed almost a year ago. sitting at a stoplight and go clocked from behind by a guy going 40 mph.sorry to hear about yours but at least we lived to tell about it.

@rain - yeah, been there a few times myself. lol inanimate objects are the bane of my existence. smiles.

@subtorp - working on it. T told me the other night to get busy on it, before i find a full time job and have blown my time. ty.

@travel - ty. and thanks for the award, working it into tonights...

@lola - i am sure E is just as lucky!

@lorraine - ty (blushing)

@ valerie - ty. (pink)

@daniel - always looking for the lesson. yeah I laughed a bit, but on ly b/c i have been there and back.

@candi - ty (red) when i get there, i will hand out free copies to those that have encouraged me along the way, so expect yours!

@lover of life - sometimes keeping it simple allows your imagination to do the work. ty (crimson)

@wings ty (majenta)

thanks for all the love today guys, back at you!

Ronda Laveen said...

Loved your transitions for paragraph to paragraph. Interesting tempo, changes and flow.

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